His hand moves up my back, fingers tangling in the hair at the back of my head
I know I’m being horribly nitpicky, but you could have cut seven words out of the last eighteen and not only would nothing have been lost, it would look better and be clearer.
His hand moves up my back, fingers tangling in my hair
Simplicity: it’s your friend.
So, like, now I want to make this longer.
The prehensile, multi-fingered extremity located at the end of his arm locomoted in an upwards direction across the large posterior area of my body, his phalanges interweaving in the protein filaments protruding from my occiput.(via lourdesdeath)